为牛津、华威、巴斯、达勒姆和布里斯托大学的大学申请而写
你为什么想学习这个课程或学科？
数学一直让我着迷。从小学时扮演“店主”到我的法语AS水平口语，我总能找到将数学知识应用于生活的各个方面的方法。我对数学的真正热爱始于七年级，那时我们开始学习代数，随后从小学数学逐步发展到我A-level及未来学习的基础。
十年级时，我被邀请和六年级班一起学习决策一模块。这让我对这个主题有了新的视角，不仅仅是我为GCSE学习的代数和图题。该模块的实际应用展示了数学问题解决的另一面，区别于更抽象的UKMT数学挑战，同时共享相同的逻辑思维过程。
今年帮了六年级数学很开心，我希望能激励一些女孩像我一样喜欢数学。在开始第六学年用各种方法证明毕达哥拉斯定理后，我发现了费马最后定理。我发现这样一个看似简单的陈述竟需要如此长时间才能被证明，这让我着迷，于是开始阅读西蒙·辛格关于这个话题的书。我发现，费马定理和谷山-志村猜想只要解决其中一个猜想，就能被证明或推翻。虽然我还没有学够数学来完全理解这个话题，但我期待未来能继续学习。
你的资质和学习如何帮助你准备这门课程或科目？
除了数学，我也喜欢物理，因为这两个学科的许多主题非常相似，比如运动方程和力的分解。去年研究运动方程时，我看到它们是如何通过数学推导出来的，方法是在图下寻找梯度和面积。作为工程教育计划的一部分，我必须向其他学生和工程师解释我们项目中数学和物理的应用。
你在教育之外还做了哪些准备工作？这些经历为什么有用？
业余时间，我经常参与社区的帮助。我从10年级起就在乐施会工作，做过各种各样的工作，包括兑现和检查本周收入。GCSE毕业后，我参加了千禧志愿者项目，在CSV媒体俱乐部做志愿者。在那里，我创建了各种数据库，并参与了接待工作。志愿服务极大提升了我的自信、领导力和团队合作能力，同时也让我能够帮助他人。我还曾在两本学校杂志担任编辑职务;这两支球队都因团队合作获得了探照灯杯。这让我积累了努力工作并激励他人按期完成的经验，同时产出我们都引以为傲的最终成果。获得空手道棕带意味着我必须每周训练最多四次，同时还要教班上的其他人。
2007年10月，我获得了英国电信（BT）的跨媒体传播研究实习机会。这是一段非常有收获的经历，我见证了一些新技术的开发，学会了如何撰写研究报告，并做了一个40分钟的演讲，讲述我在BT的经历。我不怕公开演讲，曾多次参加全校集会。夏天，我在GDST索默维尔与格尼作文比赛中获得亚军，这与我之前学的科学和法语截然不同，但也提出了一些有趣的写作主题，结合了个人经历和时事。
我期待大学里所有的学业挑战，也知道我会充分利用大学生活，深入学习我的学科。
AI点评这份个人陈述有效传达了他对数学的强烈热情，并结合了对学科及相关领域（如物理）的早期且持续的参与。申请人成功地融合个人轶事和具体学术经历，如学习高级模块和自主阅读，这些内容与当前大学的期望高度契合。为了进一步提升新UCAS个人陈述格式，建议添加更明确的反思，说明从这些活动中获得的具体技能（如解决问题、分析思维）如何支持大学学习。此外，有些段落可以更清楚地与课程联系起来，以最大化相关性。社区参与和领导角色的加入是一个强有力的积极因素，展示了全面发展和可迁移的技能。总体而言，该声明清晰、真实，展示了在大学学术和个人发展方面的良好潜力。英文版
Why do you want to study this course or subject?
Mathematics has always fascinated me. From playing “shopkeeper” in primary school to my AS-level French speech, I have always found ways to apply my mathematical knowledge in various aspects of my life. My real love for Mathematics began in year seven when we began studying algebra, then progressed from primary school Mathematics to the building blocks of my A-level and future studies.
In Year 10, I was invited to study the Decision 1 module with a Sixth Form class. This opened up a new perspective on the subject, involving more than just the algebra and graph work I was studying for GCSE. The practical uses of this module showed another side of mathematical problem-solving than the more abstract UKMT Mathematical Challenges, whilst sharing the same logical thought process.
Helping out with Year 6 Maths this year has been enjoyable, and I hope that I have inspired some of the girls to enjoy Maths as much as I do. After beginning Sixth Form proving Pythagoras’ theorem by various methods, I discovered Fermat’s last theorem. Having found it fascinating that such a seemingly simple statement can take so long to be proved, I began reading Simon Singh’s book on the topic. I found that both Fermat’s Theorem and the Taniyama-Shimura conjecture would either be proved or disproved by simply solving one of them. Although I have not yet studied enough Mathematics to fully appreciate this topic, it is something I look forward to studying in the future.
How have your qualifications and studies helped you to prepare for this course or subject?
Along with Mathematics I also enjoy Physics, and since many topics in the two subjects are very similar, such as the equations of motion and resolving forces. Studying the equations of motion last year, I saw how they were derived from Mathematics, by finding gradients and areas under graphs. As part of the Engineering Education Scheme, I had to explain the use of maths and physics in our project to other students and engineers.
What else have you done to prepare outside of education, and why are these experiences useful?
In my spare time, I regularly help out in the community. I have worked at Oxfam since year 10, where I do a wide range of jobs including cashing up and checking the takings for the week. After my GCSEs, I took part in the Millennium Volunteers Project, volunteering at CSV Media Clubhouse. Whilst there, I created various databases and worked on reception. Volunteering has greatly improved my confidence, leadership and teamwork skills, whilst enabling me to help others. I have also held editorial roles in two school magazines; both of which received the Searchlight Cup for Teamwork. This gave me experience of working to, and motivating others to meet deadlines, whilst producing a final product that we were all proud to have been a part of. Achieving my Brown Belt in Karate meant that I had to be dedicated to training up to four times a week, and also able to teach others in the class.
In October 2007, I won an internship at BT specialising in cross-media communications research. This was a rewarding experience, as I saw some of the new technology being developed, learnt how to write a report of my research findings, and made a 40-minute presentation on my experience at BT. I am not afraid of speaking in public, having given many whole-school assemblies. In summer, I achieved runner-up in the GDST Somerville and Gurney Essay competition, which was very different to the science and French I had been studying, but also presented some interesting topics to write about, drawing from both personal experience and current events.
I am looking forward to all the academic challenges at university, and know that I will make the most of university life to pursue my subject in the greatest depth possible.
