UCL化学PS 赏析

申请布里斯托尔、达勒姆、帝国理工、谢菲尔德和伦敦大学学院

你为什么想学习这个课程或学科？

每当我在化学中学到新东西，我都会有动力去发现更多，不断发现新的方面很有趣。化学不断进步，它不断改变我们在社会和环境中的生活方式，影响着我们使用的牙膏以及水的过滤方式。在一个小时内，我研究了从电子这样微小的事物到大规模钛制造。这种多样性是我喜欢化学并希望在大学学习化学的众多原因之一。

化学的大多数方面都吸引我，我觉得有机化学尤其有趣。研究反应机制并更深入地了解电子和分子间作用力，这让我更强烈地想了解反应的兴趣。目前，我最喜欢的话题是光学异构及其在制药行业的应用，因为它让我明白了理论如何被应用。我非常喜欢这个主题，甚至超出了课程大纲，研究了药物，比如沙利度胺和多巴胺，最终向全班展示了我的发现。其他形式的异构现象也引起我兴趣;观察不同结构如何导致不同反应，尤其是在研究醇氧化成醛或酮体时，令人着迷。

你的资质和学习如何帮助你准备这门课程或科目？

到目前为止，区分醛和酮是我最喜欢的实践课程，因为银镜很难获得，所以我的镜子成功时感到非常有成就感。其他实际工作也让我感到满足，因为这让我意识到精心规划和准确测量的重要性。我期待在大学提升实践技能，拓展数据分析和实验评估的能力。

我今年很享受数学的学习过程，无论是在化学课内外，因此选择在攻读A2考试的同时，继续攻读AS水平的进阶数学。我额外的数学技能和理解将极大地帮助我的学习，因为化学涉及许多定量原理。我的另一门A Level是历史，这让我能更有创造性地表达自己，并迫使我形成简洁的论点，提升写作技能。

你在教育之外还做了哪些准备工作？这些经历为什么有用？

我对辩论的兴趣促使我参加了一场模拟联合国辩论，这让我在讨论全球变暖和核武器等议题时，将我对科学的兴趣融入其中。这再次让我意识到化学在我们社会中的作用，坚定了我对化学是我所学主题的信念。

我被选为代表我所在班级进入学校理事会，同时代表我所在学校参加利物浦学校议会。我随议会访问了斯特拉斯堡的欧盟，并与来自二十多个不同国籍的学生一起参加了50周年庆典。我在欧盟参与的活动让我在大型群体面前发言时更加自信，也提升了我的团队合作能力。

我喜欢登山和滑雪，发现在xxxxxxx期间获得的户外技能进一步推动了这项爱好的发展。

我的热情和职业道德将让我从大学中获得很多，无论是学位还是大学生活本身。对职业选择保持开放的心态，我毫不怀疑通过化学学位学习所获得的技能将帮助我充分利用未来的机会。

点评：

“这是一份强有力的个人陈述，显示出对主题内容的深刻理解。他们在异构性和银镜测试等主题上详细讲解了相关内容，这非常有助于传达对这个主题的兴趣和热情。在陈述中，他们很好地运用了自己的经历，并将这些经历与化学的关系联系起来，以及这些经历如何加深了他们对该学科的兴趣。陈述结构良好，学术讨论与学科外的兴趣爱好保持良好平衡

可以做些小改进，以改进部分措辞，删除无价值的内容，为扩展讨论和具体示例创造更多空间，进一步提升陈述内容。如果能看到更多关于数学在化学中的应用细节，而不是描述申请者正在选修哪些科目，那会更好，后者已经在UCAS表格上涵盖了。

总体来说，这是一个有力的陈述，将为学生的申请增添积极的一笔。“， 'comments_on_the_statement'：”每当我在化学中学到新东西， 我变得更有动力去发现更多，不断发现新的方面很有趣。这是一个很好的开头，但如果举个具体例子说明他们觉得有趣的内容，可能会让它更为出色。化学正在开发新的牙膏供我们选择，而不仅仅是影响我们使用的牙膏。在个人陈述中最好明确提及第一人称，因为这是关于申请者的。“我们讨论的范围从电子这样微小的事物到大规模制造钛”这句话并不明确——它应反映申请者自身的经验或观点。引言很有力，明确与个人动机相关。

关于有机化学的句子如果与以下关于反应机理的讨论合并，会更顺畅。申请人应澄清电子和分子间力的作用背景。讨论光学异构体及其药物应用是一个强有力且具体的例子，尽管多巴胺不是药物，应重新表述。如果能在课程大纲之外更详细地介绍他们的研究内容，将会加强本部分。

实用化学段落有效展示了实践经验和兴趣。如果能更多地介绍理论基础，可能会进一步丰富这一点。

数学部分如果能举个例子说明数学在化学中的应用，而不仅仅是陈述所学科目，会更有帮助。历史A Level段落可以删减或删除，因为它属于边缘，成绩也在别处列出。辩论经验与化学和社会议题紧密相关，增强了动力。在校务委员会和学校议会担任领导角色，有效展现了自信和团队合作等可转移技能。关于爱好的最后一句话可以更具体地说明获得或省略的技能。结论可以通过明确申请者希望获得的技能以及更强调对化学的热情来改进。”

英文

Why do you want to study this course or subject?

Every time I learn something new in chemistry I become motivated to discover more, continually finding new aspects interesting. Advancing always, chemistry is ever changing the way we live in our society and in our environment, influencing what toothpaste we use to how water is filtered. In one hour I have studied something as small as an electron to the large scale manufacturing of titanium. This diversity is one of the many reasons why I like chemistry and wish to study it at university.

Most aspects of chemistry appeal to me, and I have found organic chemistry particularly interesting. Studying mechanisms of reactions and discovering more in depth about how electrons and intermolecular forces play a part has intensified my desire to learn more about reactions in general. Currently, my favourite topic is optical isomerism and its uses in the pharmaceutical industries, as it has shown me how theory can be applied. I enjoyed the topic so much that I researched beyond the syllabus into drugs, such as Thalidomide and Dopamine, eventually presenting my findings to the class. Other forms of isomerism are also of interest to me; it has been intriguing to see how different structures can lead to different reactions, especially in the study of the oxidation of alcohols into aldehydes or ketones.

How have your qualifications and studies helped you to prepare for this course or subject?

Distinguishing between aldehydes and ketones has so far been my favourite practical session, as the silver mirror produced is difficult to obtain and so it was rewarding when mine turned out successfully. Other practical work has also been satisfying, as it has made me realise how careful planning and accurate measuring is of vital importance. I am looking forward to improving my practical skills at university, expanding on my ability to analyse data and evaluate experiments.

I have enjoyed studying mathematics this year, both within chemistry and outside of it, and so have opted to pursue Further Mathematics to AS Level whilst studying for my A2s. My additional mathematical skills and understanding will benefit my studies enormously, as chemistry involves many quantitative principles. My other A Level is History which allows me to express myself more creatively and forces me to form concise arguments, developing my writing skills.

What else have you done to prepare outside of education, and why are these experiences useful?

My interest in debating led me to participate in a Mock UN Debate, allowing me to incorporate my interest in science as we talked about issues such as global warming and nuclear weapons. Once again this made me realise the role chemistry has in our society, consolidating my belief that chemistry is the subject for me.

I was elected to represent both my form in our school's council and my school at Liverpool Schools' Parliament. With the Parliament I visited the European Union in Strasbourg and participated in the 50th anniversary celebrations with students of over twenty different nationalities. The activities that I took part in at the European Union allowed me to gain confidence in speaking in front of large groups and also benefited my team-working skills.

I enjoy mountain walking and skiing, and have found that the outdoor skills gained during xxxxxxx have furthered this particular hobby.

My enthusiasm and work ethic will allow me to gain a lot from university, both from my degree and from university life itself. Keeping an open mind about career options, I am in no doubt that the skills that I will acquire through studying for a chemistry degree will allow me to make the most of future opportunities.