文章目录[隐藏]
- 你为什么想学习这个课程或学科？
- 你的资质和学习如何帮助你准备这门课程或科目？
- 你在教育之外还做了哪些准备工作？这些经历为什么有用？
- Why do you want to study this course or subject?
- How have your qualifications and studies helped you to prepare for this course or subject?
- What else have you done to prepare outside of education, and why are these experiences useful?
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你为什么想学习这个课程或学科？
像病毒和细菌这样微小的生物如何破坏我们的免疫系统？非编码DNA的目的是什么？正是这些问题引起了我对生物学的兴趣。
生物学是对生命的研究，因此它不断演变。正是想理解我内心和周围事物如何运作的渴望，促使我走向生物学。关键问题在生物学中找到答案，因此学习生物学是过上更健康生活的一种方式。学校给了我更多了解这个话题的机会，也满足了我的好奇心。我尤其喜欢研究我们的免疫系统，以及它如何应对外部威胁。我决定进一步深入阅读在线科学期刊，如《新科学家》、《自然》和《研究欧盟》。这让我有机会接触最新的科学发现。我目前正在进行一个生物伦理项目，研究用草甘膦除草剂Roundup处理的转基因玉米及其对老鼠健康的影响，基于法国研究员Séralini博士的研究成果。他的研究激励我深入探讨转基因玉米的摄入后果。
我计划继续攻读硕士学位，专注于免疫学和病毒学，这两个领域对我特别感兴趣。尽管我们最近发现了许多关于生物体如何防御外部威胁的知识，科学家们仍在许多领域工作。我们不知道为什么免疫系统有能力识别癌细胞，但我们不排斥肿瘤，也不清楚为什么女性比男性更容易患上某些自身免疫疾病，如狼疮。至于病毒学，它教导了一个非常微小的生物如何对我们产生巨大影响。目前尚无有效治疗艾滋病毒或疟疾的方法，类似埃博拉的病毒在猩猩中肆虐。
我相信这门课程能让我实现梦想，通过提供我所需的技能和知识。考虑到这一点，我确信英国这个研究卓越的国家，是我理想的归宿地。
你的资质和学习如何帮助你准备这门课程或科目？
学校给了我更多了解这个话题的机会，也满足了我的好奇心。我尤其喜欢研究我们的免疫系统，以及它如何应对外部威胁。我决定进一步深入阅读在线科学期刊，如《新科学家》、《自然》和《研究欧盟》。这让我有机会接触最新的科学发现。
我目前正在进行一个生物伦理项目，研究用草甘膦除草剂Roundup处理的转基因玉米及其对老鼠健康的影响，基于法国研究员Séralini博士的研究成果。他的研究激励我深入探讨转基因玉米的摄入后果。
2012年5月，我在吉利奥岛的海洋生物学研究所度过了一周，学习了海洋的动植物及其保护方法。我们早上进行了三小时的理论课，每天研究一个生态位。随后进行了一小时的实验分析，使用研究区域的代表性物种。要确定动物的具体物种，系统工作和精准是成功的关键。更实际的工作主要是潜水观察海洋中的生态位。
你在教育之外还做了哪些准备工作？这些经历为什么有用？
在我未来的职业生涯中，我希望从事科研和教学工作。我想从事研究工作，以积累自己的生物学知识，并解答重要问题。对我来说，教学是将我的知识传授给下一代、教育孩子们的方式。
我的课外活动帮助我培养了多项技能，这些技能将在后续工作和个人生活中非常有用。完成爱丁堡公爵奖及其领导课程教会了我更好地团队合作，更加负责任，并尊重截止日期。事实上，当没有团队支持时，从A点到B点在一定时间内不迷路是非常困难的。
体育运动，尤其是高级水平的帆船和滑雪，提升了我的反应速度和主动性。如果你反应不够快，几乎肯定会撞上另一艘船，或者错过一个登机门。除此之外，拉小提琴帮助我提高了精准度和耐心。
AI点评：
- 个人陈述通过深思熟虑的问题和独立学习的例子，有效传达了对生物学的强烈热情，这对于新的UCAS个人陈述来说非常出色。将免疫学和病毒学等具体兴趣题与详细问题结合，展现了专注的动力和洞察力。
- 海洋生物学研究所纳入生物伦理项目和经验，体现了切实的参与与主动性。
- 课外活动与团队合作、责任感和精准等可迁移技能紧密相关，增强了申请力。为了改进，建议明确时间线并更新表达，以反映截至2026年当前生物学主题的关注，尤其是病毒学领域。部分措辞可以润色以求清晰，但随意的语气增添了真实感。
- 在每个部分加入简短的结论陈述，总结为何这些经历对所选课程重要，可以进一步增强连贯性。总体来说，这是一份全面的陈述，与新UCAS格式的最佳实践高度契合。
英文版本
Why do you want to study this course or subject?
How can such small organisms as viruses and bacteria’s disrupt our immune system? What is the purpose of non-coding DNA? It is questions like these that have caught my interest in biology.
Biology is the study of life and therefore it evolves constantly. It is the desire to understand how things inside me and around me work that has driven me to biology. Vital questions find their answers in biology, therefore studying biology is a way to live a healthier life. School gave me a chance to learn more about this subject and to satisfy my curiosity. I especially enjoyed studying our immune system and how its responds to exterior threats. I decided to go further into the subject by reading online scientific journals such as New Scientist, Nature and Research EU. This gave me the opportunity to connect with the latest discoveries in sciences. I am currently working on a bioethics project about genetically altered maize treated with Roundup (a glyphosate herbicide) and its effects on the health of rats, using Dr Séralini’s, a French researcher, work as a basis. His work inspired me to go further into the subject and find out the consequences of the consumption of genetically altered maize.
I plan to continue my studies to the Master’s level and to specialize in both immunology and virology, which particularly interest me. Even though we have discovered a lot recently about how our organism defends itself against exterior threats, there are still many areas which scientists are working on. We don’t know why we don’t reject our tumors even though the immune system has the capacity to recognize cancer cells or why women are more susceptible to some autoimmune disease, such as lupus, than men. As for virology, it is a lesson on how a very small organism can have a big influence on us. There is still no effective treatment against HIV or malaria and an Ebola-like virus is rampant amongst orang-utans.
I believe that this course will allow me to fulfill my dreams by giving me the skills and knowledge I need. With this in mind, I am sure that the United Kingdom, a country with such excellence in research, is the right place for me to be.
How have your qualifications and studies helped you to prepare for this course or subject?
School gave me a chance to learn more about this subject and to satisfy my curiosity. I especially enjoyed studying our immune system and how its responds to exterior threats. I decided to go further into the subject by reading online scientific journals such as New Scientist, Nature and Research EU. This gave me the opportunity to connect with the latest discoveries in sciences.
I am currently working on a bioethics project about genetically altered maize treated with Roundup (a glyphosate herbicide) and its effects on the health of rats, using Dr Séralini’s, a French researcher, work as a basis. His work inspired me to go further into the subject and find out the consequences of the consumption of genetically altered maize.
I spent one week in May 2012 at the Institute for Marine Biology on the island of Giglio, where I learned about the flora and fauna of the ocean and how to protect it. We had three hours theory in the morning where we studied one ecological niche each day. This was followed by one hour of experimental analysis, using representative species from the studied area. To determine the exact specie of the animal, methodical work and precision were the keys to success. More practical work was mainly diving to observe the ecological niches in the sea.
What else have you done to prepare outside of education, and why are these experiences useful?
For my later career, I hope to work in research and in teaching. I want to work in research in order to develop my own knowledge in biology and to get answers on to important questions. Teaching is for me a way to pass on my knowledge to the next generation and educate children.
My extra-curricular activities have helped me to develop several skills that will be useful in my further work and my private life. Doing my Duke of Edinburgh’s Award and its leader course have taught me to work better within a team, to be more responsible and to respect deadlines. Indeed, going from A to B in a certain time frame without getting lost is very difficult when you are not supported by your team.
Sports, in particular sailing and skiing at an advanced level, have developed my reaction speed and my ability to take initiatives. If you do not react fast enough, you will almost certainly collide with another boat or you miss a gate. In addition to these, playing the violin has helped me to improve my precision and my patience.
