雅思大作文7分范文及解析：回归传统观念

观点类大作文，社会类话题

Individual greed and selfishness has been the basis of the modern society. Some people think that we must return to the older and more traditional values of respect for the family and the local community in order to create a better world to live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 

题目来源：2015年6月18日亚太雅思大作文

1、题目大意

个人的贪婪和自私一直是现代社会的基础。有些人认为，我们必须回到更古老、更传统的价值观，即尊重家庭和当地社区，以创造一个更好的生活世界。你在多大程度上同意或不同意？

2、思路解析

这是一道观点类大作文，聊得是是否要遵循更古老的价值观。审题时注意三点， 一是绝对词“must”，一般遇到绝对化表达从反对角度切入更合适；二是题目的观点中包含了因果关系，即“遵循传统价值观，能创造更好的世界”，需要对这个因果关系进行讨论；三是题目中提到的“greed and selfishness”和“respect for the family and the local community”在实际论证中都需要提及。下面，月半鸭和大家一起来看下具体观点。

首先来看合理的角度。过度追求个人利益确实会造成许多弊病，比如邻里关系变得愈发冷漠、社会凝聚力下降，大家更在意自己的得失而不愿意主动帮助他人。因此，呼吁重新重视家庭和社区利益，鼓励大家相互交流和帮助，确实有可能创造一个更好的生活环境。

其次来看反对的角度，同样有两方面。

一方面，一些传统价值观并不适应现代社会，完全遵循并无意义。比如包办婚姻，虽然尊重了家族利益，但完全忽视个人的自由和选择，对于个人来说，这种古老传统的生活模式是否更好值得商榷。

另一方面，追求个人利益无论在以前还是现在都是存在的，回归传统价值观并没有办法消除这些影响。同时还可能造成新的问题，比如对于现有制度的改革进而引发的动荡，很难说这么做一定会创造更好的社会。

3、提纲

4、高分范文示例

Modernization has profoundly impacted the modern world's lifestyles and values. In this context, some people believe that individuals act in their own best interests regardless of the welfare of the family or the community; therefore, it would be optimal to adopt the older values. I do not believe, however, that a return to traditional values will address the mentioned issue.

It appears that adhering to a bygone lifestyle is a means of strengthening interpersonal bonds. On the one hand, people who form close relationships with their relatives can receive financial and emotional assistance from the surroundings. On the other hand, exchanges within a community contribute to a more agreeable living environment and improve people's interpersonal skills. Living in a community where individuals share common interests and advantages creates a more harmonious society that discourages conflict and promotes empathy among its members.

However, the disadvantages of the conventional way of living can be intolerable. In the past, for example, arranged marriages denied freedom of choice and individual preferences, and patriarchy, which gave men absolute control, failed to recognise the fundamental rights and needs of women and children, resulting in their unjust oppression. In addition, the concept of a better world evolves over time, and a return to historical values does not solve the problems of personal greed and selfishness, as these traits are inherent to human nature and cannot be eradicated in either the present or the past.

In conclusion, I believe that reverting to the old way of life is ineffective in making the world a better place because the disadvantages appear to greatly outweigh the advantages.

5、相关词汇和语法结构

establish intimate connection   建立亲密关系

amicable   和睦的

interpersonal   人际的

a sense of empathy   同理心

arranged marriage   包办婚姻

patriarchy   父权制

absolute authority   绝对权威

material scarcity   物质匮乏