文章目录[隐藏]
- 你为什么想学习这个课程或学科?
- 你的资质和学习如何帮助你准备这门课程或科目?
- 你在教育之外还做了哪些准备工作?这些经历为什么有用?
- 个人陈述评审员的专家反馈
- AI生成的反馈
- Why do you want to study this course or subject?
- How have your qualifications and studies helped you to prepare for this course or subject?
- What else have you done to prepare outside of education, and why are these experiences useful?
学生为申请LSE、剑桥、伦敦大学学院和华威大学的大学而写
你为什么想学习这个课程或学科?
我一生中所做的每一个行动,以及将来将要做的每一个,都可以用经济学的工具来分析。这对许多科学领域都适用;比如物理、化学、生物学或心理学,仅举几例。然而,经济学的独特之处在于,它或许是唯一一门如果应用它,能显著且持续地提升我决策质量的科学。此外,经济学真正卓越的是其多样性和广泛的应用范围。
我最近开始阅读经济学文献,似乎读得越多,经济学就越吸引人。我最近读过一本小说,《怪诞经济学》,作者是史蒂文·莱维特,作者是斯蒂芬·达布纳,讲述了数据的多样性,数据如何用来解决复杂问题,以及数据如何激发有见地的问题。我记得有一晚,我觉得有些律师收入很高,而有些则是普通薪水,瞬间一股想法如洪水般涌上心头,我意识到这种工资差异证明了刑事司法系统对那些能负担得起优秀律师的人不公平且有偏见。可以收集和整理大量数据,从这项研究中得出许多有趣的问题,比如富裕的人是否比贫困者更道德。
我喜欢挑战,概念越抽象或越难,我就越努力去完整理解它。我对经济学的热情与数学密切相关,这也是为什么我对学习经济学中更数学化的部分,如博弈论和计量经济学感到无比兴奋的原因。我一直很喜欢学习商业,但科学和数学也是如此,不过去年我发现经济学才是我热爱的。它改变了我看待世界的方式,我无法想象还有什么课程比我更想学。我经常与同行讨论经济学,我很享受这些。这些问题涵盖了从有趣的供需曲线形状(例如韦布伦商品的曲线)到经济运行的最高效方式。我还没说服我的朋友,中央计划经济可能永远无法像自由市场那样高效。
你的资质和学习如何帮助你准备这门课程或科目?
大学毕业后,我将获得数学和进阶数学的A-level课程,其中包括两个统计学模块。在AS我选修了广泛的科目;物理、数学、商业、经济学和批判性思维,通过选修这些广泛的学科,我能够聚焦于自己最热爱的领域。阅读和理解《通论》可能是我做过的最难的事情之一。我花了好几个星期阅读它,花了无数小时思考凯恩斯一些更复杂的论断。我无法装作完全理解,但我可以自豪地声称我理解了大多数内容。我相信这对我大学学习时会很有帮助,也会让我受益匪浅。由于我已经比A-level要求的经济学水平更高,我可能会发现这个差距比一些没有经济学背景的同龄人要小。
你在教育之外还做了哪些准备工作?这些经历为什么有用?
我觉得要发挥最佳状态,保持健康和体能非常重要。我每周去健身房两次,也经常游泳。我尽力保持健康均衡的饮食,这也让我学业成绩有所提升。我认为自己很亲切,能够很好地团队合作,虽然坦白说,作为领导者而非追随者,我更擅长。我觉得我的性格非常适合大学环境,我会珍惜在那里度过的每一段时光,同时也希望能为别人丰富这里的时光。
大学课程结束后,我想从事金融行业的工作。将经济学原理应用于市场是我非常喜欢的事情。我记得最近在《一般理论》中读到,投机几乎没有其他作用,除了为市场提供流动性。起初我很难过,因为我的职业抱负本质上是自私的,不会为经济带来财富或利益。然而,经过反思,我意识到流动性确实有价值,并且在市场上是必需的。
个人陈述评审员的专家反馈
[“个人陈述开头引人入胜,但避免在第一句之后列出。解释比陈述物品更好。“,”这是通往书籍和探索感兴趣物品的好链接。对所提及主题的反思非常好,显示了对该学科理解的深度。“课外部分篇幅不错,占20%。”有些语言过于刻意想给人留下深刻印象,确保是你平时会写的内容。“,”语法和句子结构在某些地方不对劲“,”关于A-level的内容太多“, “关于GCSE成绩的判决应被撤销”
AI生成的反馈
这些反馈由人工智能生成,基于这份个人陈述的文本:
个人陈述有效传达了对经济学的真诚热情,辅以相关阅读和求知欲,这与UCAS新提出的强调真实声音的个人陈述期望相契合。结合个人经历和反思,如与同龄人讨论及理解复杂经济学文本的挑战,增添了深度和个性。不过,可以通过去除对GCSE的引用和A-level中过多细节来保持专注和简洁,仍有改进空间。此外,简化句子,避免过于复杂的语言,有助于提升可读性,确保候选人的真实声音闪耀。加入更具体的课外活动技能示例,将进一步加强第三部分。总体而言,这份声明在新的结构化UCAS格式下提交时非常有力且准备充分。
附上英文
Why do you want to study this course or subject?
Every action I have and will ever take in my life can be analysed through the tools of economics. This is true for many sciences; such as Physics, Chemistry, Biology or Psychology, to name but a few. However what sets Economics apart is how it is perhaps the only science that would significantly and consistently improve the quality of my decisions if applied. Furthermore, what makes Economics truly outstanding is its diversity and broad range of application.
I have recently began reading economic literature, it seems as if the more I read the more enthralling Economics becomes. A novel I have read recently, “Freakonomics" by Steven Levitt, Stephen Dubner, is about the versatility of data, how data can be used to solve complex problems and how data can provoke insightful questions. I remember one night thinking how some lawyers earn a lot of money while others have an average salary, instantly a torrent of ideas washed over me, I realised that this discrepancy in wages is proof that the criminal justice system is unfair and biased towards those who can afford a superior lawyer. So much data could be collected and collated, so many interesting questions could arrive from this study such as do people who are wealthier behave more ethically then those less well off.
I enjoy challenges, the more abstract or harder a concept is the more I will try to understand it fully. My passion for Economics is paralleled closely to Mathematics, this is the reason for why, truthfully, I am immoderately excited about studying the more mathematical facets of Economics such as game theory and econometrics. I have always enjoyed learning about Business, but the same can be said for Science and Mathematics, however last year I learnt that Economics is what I love. It has changed the way I view the world, I can’t fathom any other course I would rather study. I very often have economic discussions with my peers, which I relish. These range from the shape of interesting supply demand curves e.g. that of Veblen goods, to the most efficient way to run an economy. I am yet to convince my friend that a centrally planned economy will probably never be as efficient as the free market.
How have your qualifications and studies helped you to prepare for this course or subject?
When I finish college I will have an A level in Mathematics and Further Mathematics which includes 2 modules of Statistics. At AS I took a wide range of subjects; Physics, Mathematics, Business, Economics and Critical Thinking, by taking this wide range of subjects I have been able to hone in on what I am most passionate about. Reading and understanding “The General Theory” is probably one of the hardest things I have ever had to do. I spent weeks reading it and countless hours thinking over some of Keynes more complex assertions. I cannot posture and pretend that I fully comprehended all of it but I can proudly claim to have understood the majority. I believe this will serve me well when I study at university and stand me in good stead. By already having a greater command of economics than is required at A level I will possibly find the gap lesser than that of perhaps some of my peers who have not.
What else have you done to prepare outside of education, and why are these experiences useful?
I feel that in order to perform at my best it is very important to stay fit and healthy. I go to the gym twice a week and swimming regularly. I do my best to maintain a healthy, balanced diet all of which to my avail and improved academic results. I believe myself to be personable and capable of working well in a team, although admittedly more so as a leader than a follower. I think that my personality is so well suited to a university environment that I will relish all my time there and at the same time, hopefully, I will be able to enrich the time that is spent there for others as well.
When I finish my course at university, I would like to pursue a job in the financial sector. Applying economic principles to markets is something I greatly enjoy. I remember recently reading in “The General Theory” that speculation serves almost no purpose other than providing liquidity for markets. At first I was saddened to learn that my career aspirations were essentially selfish and would create no wealth or benefit to the economy. However on reflection I realised that liquidity certainly has value and is needed in the markets.

