帝国计算机PS -2-赏析2026

你为什么想学习这个课程或学科？

从布莱切利园首台可编程真空管计算机到如今广泛可用的云计算技术，计算的发展对于提升人类生活质量和可持续性至关重要。我希望学习计算机科学，以便利用我的技能和知识参与其未来，推动人类进步;特别是为了改善社会中最不幸群体的生活。计算是实现这一目标最强大的工具之一，因为它能够连接人们并解决问题。例如，水泄漏检测系统通过减少水资源浪费，可以在最需要资金的国家节省数十亿美元的资金和生命。

云计算应用的广阔可能性在IBM实习时激发了我的想象力。我看到一个正在开发的产品——一种超市农产品的自动化追踪系统，大大提升了效率。类似的技术也可以被开发出来，帮助贫困社区中的创业者，从而造福其中的企业家。

完成课程后，我计划在一家为发展中国家公民服务的道德企业工作，或进入学术研究领域，进一步提升我们在计算领域的理解和能力，从而提升当代及未来世代的生活。今年夏天，我在剑桥大学丘吉尔学院的萨顿信托暑期学校学习了芯片和密码银行卡的安全工程。我觉得这非常有趣，它的持续发展绝对是我期待进一步深入研究的内容。

你的资质和学习如何帮助你准备这门课程或科目？

在A-level数学、进阶数学和物理中，系统且逻辑地解决问题，为我应对计算机科学中的挑战做好了准备。决策模块中的算法和逻辑主题非常有趣，也让我了解了计算机程序的核心结构原理。我通过参加午餐时间的延伸课程和剑桥大学的HE+课程来补充对数学的兴趣，这两者都探索了课程大纲之外的主题，同时还自学了另外两个模块。

我关于网络战争主题的扩展项目与政治、时事和计算领域密切相关，这些领域都对我极为感兴趣。它探讨了一个鲜为人知但真正巨大的计算对世界影响的潜在影响。这让我能够提升自己的研究技能，接触到哈佛的参考文献，并让我有机会提升扩展的论文写作能力。

A-level音乐与我的其他科目不同，它是一门高度创造的艺术。我在写作方面的成功表明我也能兼顾并蓄和富有创造性地创作——这些都是任何学位课程中都非常重要的方面。

你在教育之外还做了哪些准备工作？这些经历为什么有用？

我带领学校的一个团队最终赢得了2012年NDS红按钮挑战赛，这是一个为期半年的项目，旨在设计和推介一款面向卫星电视市场的应用。因此，我获得了学校年度计算机奖杯。这，加上去年参加扶轮社青年领导力奖住宿周末活动，锻炼了我的管理、团队合作和演讲能力——这些对我拟定课程的小组项目非常有用。

我经常在本地演出和商业活动中弹贝斯、电吉他或钢琴，业余时间和两个乐队一起演奏。我喜欢看到无数小时的练习、编曲和排练逐渐成为一场精致的表演。我还在中学担任摇滚学院项目的导师，教由音乐初学者组成的乐队。它提升了我的人际交往能力，帮助我变得更有耐心和自信。

我还喜欢公路自行车和一级方程式赛车。我尤其对这些运动高度战术化的元素感到着迷，以及球队成功策略背后的逻辑推理和思考，这些策略往往能使他们超越更优秀的竞争对手。

专家反馈

“很高兴在个人陈述中看到对职业感兴趣，表明申请人在考虑未来”，“在IBM的工作经验非常好，但介绍得不够详细。申请人对它感兴趣的是什么？为什么？“，”EPQ部分提到引用是好事，但并未深入探讨与应用课程的联系“，”这里提到的课外活动实在太多了。“，”这份个人陈述中需要更多涉及计算机科学。“，”A-level内容过多“，”词语大写很多“]

AI反馈个人陈述展现了对计算机科学的真诚热情，并突出了以伦理影响和创新为核心的明确职业抱负。申请人有效将课程作业和项目，尤其是网络战扩展项目，与相关计算主题相结合。然而，该声明若能更深入探讨，并更清晰地将经验与计算机科学联系起来，减少对A-level细节和部分课外活动的强调，将会受益。通过具体见解和反思扩展IBM的工作经验，将增强应用效果。纠正不一致的大小写，确保内容准确且相关，将提升连贯性。总体而言，更注重与新UCAS结构相符的学科相关技能和动机，将提升2026年及以后申请的清晰度和影响力。英文版本

Why do you want to study this course or subject?

From Bletchley Park’s first programmable vacuum tube computer to the widely accessible cloud of today, the development of computing has been essential to advancing the quality and sustainability of human life. I wish to study computer science in order to be part of its future by using my skills and knowledge to help progress humanity further; in particular, to improve the lives of our society’s least fortunate. Computing is one of the most powerful tools available for this, through its ability to connect people together and solve problems. An example is water leakage detection systems, which through reducing water wasted, could save billions in money and lives in the countries which need the money most.

The vast possibilities regarding the applications of cloud computing caught my imagination during a work experience placement at IBM. I saw a product in development - an automated tracking system for supermarket produce that greatly improves efficiency. Similar technology could be developed to benefit poorer communities by helping the entrepreneurs within them.

After completing my course, I plan to either work for an ethical business serving citizens in developing countries, or enter academic research to further advance our understanding and capabilities in computing to enhance the lives of current and future generations. At the Sutton Trust Summer School at Churchill College, Cambridge this summer, I studied security engineering in chip and pin bank cards. I found this really fascinating and its continued development is definitely something I look forward to studying and researching in further detail.

How have your qualifications and studies helped you to prepare for this course or subject?

Tackling problems methodically and logically in A-level Maths, Further Maths and Physics has prepared me for confronting challenges in computer science. The algorithm and logic topics in the decision modules have been really enjoyable and introduced me to the core structural principles of computer programs. I supplemented my interest in maths by attending lunchtime extension classes and Cambridge University’s HE+ programme, both exploring topics outside the syllabus, and also by self-studying two additional modules.

My Extended Project on the topic of cyberwarfare relates very closely to the areas of politics, current affairs and computing, all areas of strong interest to me. It explores a lesser-known but truly massive potential impact of computing on the world. It allowed me to build upon my research skills, introduced me to Harvard referencing and gave me an opportunity to strengthen my extended essay writing skills.

A-level Music contrasts with my other subjects in that it is a highly creative art. My success with composition shows that I am also able to work eclectically and creatively – important aspects within any degree course.

What else have you done to prepare outside of education, and why are these experiences useful?

I led a team from my school which ultimately won the 2012 NDS Red Button Challenge, a half-year project to design and pitch an app for the satellite TV market. For this, I was awarded the school’s annual computing cup. This, together with taking part in the Rotary Club Youth Leadership Award residential weekend last year developed my management, team working and presentation skills – useful abilities for group projects on my proposed course.

I regularly play bass guitar, electric guitar or piano at regular local gigs and at commercial functions with two bands in my free time. I enjoy the journey of seeing many hours of practice, song-arrangement, and the rehearsing of them gradually become a polished performance. I also work at my secondary school as a tutor for their Rock Academy programme, teaching bands consisting of musical beginners. It has improved my people skills by helping me to become more patient and confident.

My other interests include Road Cycling and Formula One. I am particularly fascinated by the highly tactical element of these sports, and the logical reasoning and thought behind teams’ successful strategies which often enable them to outdo their superior competitors.